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Six seasons.
  Seventy-seven weeks.
    Seventeen and one half months.
      Nineteen and one quarter lunar cycles.
        Five hundred thirty four days and nights.
          Seven hundred sixty-eight thousand nine hundred
and 60 seconds.

We spent every one of these units of time together.

Spring
In the shadow of the oncoming storm, a tree shudders within, dropping its' fruit. 
Tides rush before the storm carrying generations to a land with wounded soil where they perish. 

Summer
Numbers are not real. I count them 3..5..23..88, 89, 90, 91..98, 99..115..Habit. See it. Sum it. Submit. 
Pulling, pounding, pushing, breathing, the song of the new cicadas. 
In harmony a steady nightly rhythm.  (701)

Fall
Soaked in an ocean of soiled linen, daring desires, pheromones, swollen lips and coliseum kisses. 
Your spasmodic shell satiated, separates, splinters, shatters, sails straight South.

Winter
Through the long nights I've been cinched tightly together in a sailor's knot, with you filling my sails. 
Systematically you raised the anchor and departed as the sun rose behind my love veiled eyes.

Death
Is where the wine is not consumed.
Is where the unleavened bread is untouched.
Is in me, where love for a child exists that cannot be born.





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© - all rights reserved - M.Mimo.Art -  KissTheSunrise - 2013
there are days I don't think of you at all. there are days i don't know my name.
there are nights I think only of you, they drive me into the floor like a fucking spike and
I cry out, but no one hears. no one will ever hear them for they're the 'silent scream'.


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Given 2013-06-23
Sword Swallower by =KissTheSunrise ( Suggested by alapip and Featured by BeccaJS )
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crossing-ariel Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013
Congrats on your DD. :) :heart:
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013
Oh my goodness! wow.. thank you so much.  It means a lot coming from you.  I'm so shocked to have comments from the 'writers' community. :heart:
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crossing-ariel Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013
Aww, don't be silly. It was well-deserved. :)
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013
Thanks.  I wasn't being silly though, I meant it. :D
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toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013
It's a little late, but I hijacked your title for a found title thing, and I thought you should know. :heart:
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
Thanks I think?  Honestly, I have no idea what that means.  Are your comments meant for me too? :o
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toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
Oh, no, I would not wish anything close to that on you. Ever.

I used your title in a found title poem. :iconthetitlepage: would probably have a better explanation for it. Basically, each line of the poem has to come from a title of a preexisting work on dA.
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
ohhhhhh haha !!  Well that's nice to know.  I swear I completely freaked out.. like wtf?
I thought maybe I'd said something awful to you but couldn't place where/when. :roll:
Prompts using titles, how clever. (:  I feel pretty silly now. lol  :stupidme:
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toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
:heart:
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Kismet19 Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I love pieces like this that blur the line between poetry and prose.
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013
Thank you muy mucho!  I'm not a poet as you've noticed. 
I enjoy reading good poetry, but I like to write prose. 
Now.. if I could just get better at it I'd be super happy. :w00t: :heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well lookie, lookie, lookie who got a DD on a fantastic piece. :heart:
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013
Yeah, imagine that.  I think it's actually a mistake but I'm not giving the money back. ;p

Frankly, it shocked me because I don't think any of my writing is that good, particularly that poem, I'd just written it.
I guess that shut me up for a while though. 
I think the coolest thing I learned from this whole thing is how many nice people there still are on dA that I've never read
or even heard of.  They made it all a lot of fun for me, sorta like you always do for me. :heart:

I feel bad for all the people who really deserve and want one of these things.  I'd like to give them this one. I'd be fine with that.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're a poor judge of your own work. :B
This is very deserving, obviously.
And yes, there are so many lovely people around here. (:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013
Oh this is just breathtaking... Every word weighed perfectly against the others. Take one out and they'd crumble to dust...

One mistake: 'In the shadow of the oncoming storm, a tree shudders within, dropping it's fruit.'
Should be 'its' fruit, without the comma. But other than that, this poem is perfect.
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013
Thank you so much Cailin for your lovely comment!  :heart:

At the comma I wanted the reader to pause long enough to notice that the fruit has ownership(the tree), but I
didn't want to use a semi-colon because it looked like a roadblock.  Is the comma still improperly used in that context? 
Hmmm.. I obviously thought it was correct, but English grammar is a beast sometimes. I'll take mathematics any day. :love:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013
You're welcome, dear. :)

I'm sorry, it wasn't the comma I meant at all! I meant the word 'apostrophe.' The comma is fine. Perfect, actually. It's the apostrope when you wrote 'it's fruit' that shouldn't have been there. (I'm having a hard time with English lately... :XD: )
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013
Oh !! LOL I didn't see it either  I missed it at least three times.. oh dear. :roll:

Thanks again.  I propose we all speak French the rest of the week. :hug: :heart:
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cliselle Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh my goodness, this is absolutely charming and captivating!
I love it. 
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013
It's so nice of you to say that.  Thank you so much! =)
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013
Wow a heart explosion !!  Thank you so much Eve it means a lot coming from you. :hug: :D
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You've very welcome, my dear Megan!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconsweethugplz::iconflyingheartsplz:
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Karinta Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Student General Artist
Even the caption is a poem. I love the sections in this piece. It's definitely non-traditional, but it works surprisingly well, and is pretty coherent! :D :huggle:
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013
You're very gracious, thank you for reading it. :hug:

I'd like to rewrite "Summer" because it's all that's left of my first draft.
I'd intended this to be more numerically based about a past lover, but ehh..
things changed and paragraphs got swapped around until I got tired of
fooling around with it, and submitted it.
Coherent..? lol .. why thank you!  that's the nicest thing you could have said! :heart:
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Karinta Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Student General Artist
Hm. I see... I think that Summer is perfect for the poem, in its own context. There is nothing I would change at all!

And the matter of coherence - I've read SO many poems that didn't feel like a unified thought or statement, and just went from topic to topic. This ain't one.
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013
Oh. Well thanks again then ! =)

I like you because you like Tolkien and The Hobbit.  :D
Is the LOTR's omitted because it's just a given or for another reason?
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Karinta Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Student General Artist
:-) You're welcome.
And LOTR is omitted because it's too long and dense. :D Whereas the Hobbit is a little more readable.
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SimplySilent Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013
:heart: Congrats on the DD! :clap:
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013
Thank you very much. :hug: :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013   General Artist
this is just sublime! :love: congratulations on the DD, darling lady! :huggle:
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013
Thank you so much m'dear!  It means a lot to me when you guys from the lit. community recognise one of my scrawlings. :hug: :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013   General Artist
your words are not scrawlings but pure silver, dear heart. :tighthug: :heart: :heart: :heart:
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013
Aww.. merci ! :hug: You're nice to say that .   I meant to say "because you guys write all the time, and I don't.".. but it never made it outta my head and to my fingers. :roll:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013   General Artist
de rien! :huggle:
that's the thing, even when you're writing less you still achieve such superb outcome
i can only imagine teh level of your writing should you choose to write again on a regular basis <3 <3 <3
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013
Noooo no no no I don't think that's it at all.  The DD process is skewed by having friends and followers who submit your work.
I've never had anyone submit my work before, but the person who did it ( :iconalapip: ) has always had big time pull with the dA staff who
select the DD's for the writing community, so my point is it's not fair, it's more of "who" you know.
Actually, I do write every day during the school year and a little bit now during vacation on my doctoral dissertation. It's just a very
different kind of technical writing as opposed to poetry or prose.  So see it's not so straightforward, but, I'm not straight either so.. la lala la  8-)

Thank you for the nice thoughts and words, you're sweet.   :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013   General Artist
ahahaha, whatta way to end a statement, darling woman :giggle:

nah, you're that incredible is all it is :heart:
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013
You weren't supposed to catch that so easily. :blush:

Look Princess.. you're the incredibly one, we both know it so let's just
let it rest at that.  OK?  OK. :hug: :heart:
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SteffenC-itsjustme Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Change the 6 seasons to 16 (and the rest of the numbers accordingly) and this is me.

This is beautifully written and very heartfelt.
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013
That's a sweet thing to say, thank you. :D

Why 16 though.. I'm curious. ;p
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SteffenC-itsjustme Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure ^^ easy to leave such a comment, when your poetry is so very lovely.

Hehe, I'm an open book, so.. (now I find out if my interpretation of the beginning of your poem was correct, if not, my original comment and everything in extension thereof becomes somewhat invalid :P)

Lost the love of my life around 8 months ago..don't worry she didn't die, she just stopped loving me after 4 years. And that sounded waay too dramatic, but that does make 16 seasons and that's the reason. So, that's the case, as simple as it can be put. Hope it satisfied some of your curiosity ;P
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013
Shush! .. You're inflating my already huge ego beyond all recognition. lol
Yes 16 seasons, correct. 

Aww..man I hate that, it's tragic. I'm sad for all the heartache it caused you. :hug:

I'm terrible in a relationship, but I'm doing better this time around. :love: :heart:
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SteffenC-itsjustme Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, I'm sure it does no harm at all! I don't believe you have such a huge ego and I will testify on that :P

Thanks for your empathy. It is tragic, when something like that happens, but that's life. And I'm here for all the ups and downs it can throw at me, I'll take it all till I disassemble and become something else. ^^

Hehe, I'm so happy to hear that, that makes me smile. And I'm happy for you <3 enjoy it to the fullest, is all I can say!
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013
You're much too kind. =)

Yes, occasionally that is how life goes, but it doesn't have to always be so difficult.  It shouldn't
be like that between two lovers.  I've learned to say I'm sorry quickly and sincerely.  I've found
it's better not to speak than to say something hurtful, no matter who is right or wrong.  I fail at
this often, but I'm learning and trying harder.

Thank you. (:  I do enjoy her to the fullest. :heart:
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